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GO AWAY! (FITP & Creative Writing Ink)

Stop it!
Stop it!
Please stop it!
They told me you’re not real. They told me the pills will kill you. But why are you still here?
LEAVE ME ALONE!!
GO AWAY!!

*****

“Doctor, she is screaming again,” said the nurse.
The Doctor sigh, “Is her dead daughter in the room again?”
“Yes!”
“You know Nurse Amy, the pills will never cure her conscience.  After all, she DID murder her daughter.”

Total: 71 words

Word: Go ( max words: 150 words)

This is my third flash for the fifth quarter of Flash In The Pan hosted by Red @ M3 .

Inspired by: Writing Prompts @ Creative Writing Ink Prompt August 8th

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© Liz Kasameyer

Because this coming Saturday is August 17 (my monthly schedule for Indonesia Banget) so, I shared my flash today instead of on Saturday 🙂

If you have more free time, do check my serial Aqeela and Me 🙂

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15 responses to “GO AWAY! (FITP & Creative Writing Ink)”

  1. TBM

    I wasn’t expecting that last line. Nice

    Reply
    1. Novroz

      Thank you 🙂

      Reply
  2. Gray Dawster

    There is a wicked twist right at the end of this
    one Miss. Novia but guess what? I like it a lot
    my great friend 🙂 Nicely written…

    Andro xxxx

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    1. Novroz

      Thank you Andro xx
      The moment I saw the picture, I have an image of her being a ghost…but I have written too many ghost story, I want this to be imaginary ghost.

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      1. Gray Dawster

        You have finitely captured the interest with this one my great friend and nicely written too, I have enjoyed it a lot 🙂

        Have fun today and I hope you have
        received your Club Wombania Certificate? 🙂

        Andro xxxx

        Reply
        1. Novroz

          Thank you again Andro 🙂

          I have just seen it on my mail…thanks. I will edit it as soon as I can. Have nice week teman (it’s Indonesian for friend) 🙂

          Reply
  3. Red

    Fabulous twist at the end!
    xxx

    Reply
    1. Novroz

      Thank you Red 🙂

      Reply
  4. Caroline

    You sure know how to end a story with a major twist. Creepy.

    Reply
    1. Novroz

      Thanks 🙂
      A story without a twist is like cooking without salt 😉

      Reply
  5. Alice Audrey

    Nice zinger at the end. Maybe she’s really being haunted. Great set up.

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    1. Novroz

      Thank you Audrey 🙂
      I was thinking of a real ghost story when i saw that pic but I thought a conscience is also interesting.

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      1. Alice Audrey

        It gives the story a different feel. One I like. I was just tossing out the fact that it’s still possible to read the ghost into it even when you didn’t force it, which creates even more depth.

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  6. WordsFallFromMyEyes

    Excellent.

    Reply
    1. Novroz

      Thank you Noeleen 🙂

      Reply

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