“Fish!”
“What about it?”
“Make a joke about it! You’re good with jokes, right?”
“Why should I?”
“ ‘Coz I am bored!”
“So?”
“Come on! Cheer me up a little will you!”
“I don’t feel like it!”
“Why?”
“Because my pet fish just died last night.”
“oh…Sorry”
Total: 48 words.
I know…this isn’t a good story but I quite like it. I have been turned into a Mighty Boosh fan and somehow I can imagine this sort of conversation between Howard and Vince. I had done similar story before called Perfect Company where the story is written only in conversation.
This is part of Red at Mommy’s Money Matter’s Flash in The Pan for Fish with 100 words limit.
I hope I can come up with new flash fiction every week, there are 13 words in Flash in The Pan, I have done 3 so far you can see all the flashes at Red’s Blog.
The bold ones mean that I have made a story out of that word.
- Pepper (75)
- Squeak (75)
- Ripple (75)
- Drug (75)
- Wake (125)
- Corner (125)
- Book (125)
- Fire (125)
- Ring (100)
- Fish (100)
- Mark (100)
- Flash (100)
- Trace (50)
Red just added a new word in Hot Flash, The word is Dance with 50 words.
Oh, this is great. I really love these conversations. And you have caught another flasher on this as well. She turned in one which is all quotes. The creativity is wonderful.
I think this is a fine story. You manage to capture something which happens all the time when we say things we have no idea may not be easy for someone else. That is aces in my book.
❤ xxx
Oh really? May I have the link please…. 🙂
It’s a fun style but it really needs some thinking because no description should be written except from conversation.
Thank you red. I guess a story inspired by comedian can also be good 🙂
Absolutely, Stop by and meet Tess. She is busy with NaNoWriMo, but she has been flashing for a while. ❤ http://letscutthecrap.wordpress.com/2012/10/24/flash-in-the-pan-ripple/
Thank you Red 🙂
I will visit her straight away
As if making up jokes on command isn’t hard enough. Shesh.
Great little snippet of dialogue.
a profesional comedian can easily tackle that task, I supposed 😉
Thank you Audrey
I’ve known some people who were quick witted like that. Me, I need to think about it too much.
Me too! I can say something stupid most of the time (I guess that’s why my students like me) but never could do it on request.
I can come up with zingers now and then, but it has to be unexpected.
To be honest this didn’t work so well for me but when I read that you had this in mind as a small comedic piece, it did. I can see how with funny faces this might be quite good.
I know what you mean. When I first wrote it, I really am thinking of Howard and Vince…and then when I posted it I thought people who don’t know them might not get it…that’s why I wrote the explanation afterward.
I am glad you can understand it a bit.
Hi dee hi, We have visited your website many times. I heard about it through my fiancee. I made up my mind to put up a comment. My family and I really like humor; hence I contemplated providing a fabulous joke with you and your traffic. “Waiter! This coffee tastes like mud.” “Yes sir, it’s fresh ground.”
That’s a nice joke 🙂