In December 2011, Anomalous Material, led by Castor, had held another Hollywood Fantasy Draft…but, it was done in a different way. We are no longer need to write Movie Pitch. However, because I pick all my actors based on the story I wanted to pitch…I decided to still write the pitch even though no one else had done it. I don’t want the actors I have picked go wasted.
The story is a bit cruel and I find it hard to write the ending. When I wrote it as a short story, it is fine to have a hanging ending but as a movie, I want it to have a clear ending…not as inconclusive as the short. You can read my original short story here.
Here goes my third movie pitch
Logline: Based on a short story by Novia Rozet, a.k.a me, comes the story of a serial killer unlike anyone has ever seen before. Will you believe your eyes when you see him?
Director: Guillermo DelToro
I chose him as my director because he could create the kind of atmosphere I want for my movie. He did well in creating mysterious and depressing atmosphere in Pan’s Labyrinth.
Jennifer Connelly will play as Caroline Murphy, a smart and attractive homicide detective. She was a great detective but she had a mysterious aura that made her not so famous amongst other detectives. Her only friend was her partner and her boyfriend.
Martin Freeman will play as Nicholas Charlton, Caroline’s partner. Nick was the perfect partner for Caroline as he was the opposite of her. He was cheerful and liked by others. They have been partners for years and he was practically the only man Caroline had ever cared more than any of her boyfriends.
Sigourney Weaver will play as Alexandra McCarthy. She was the head of Homicide division.
Ewan McGregor will play as Harry Smith, Caroline’s boyfriend.
Benedict Cumberbatch will play as The Hooded Man, the wanted serial killer.
Robert Pattisson will play as Gus Stewart, one of the victims that showed some resistance toward the predator.
Caroline was seen running through a thick conservation park. She was chasing a man who was wearing a robe and a hood that covered his head and face. The fog started covering the place and made things difficult to be seen. The man moved around in confident as he knew the place so well while Caroline was grasping in the dark as she knew nothing about that place. She relied on her hearing sense more then her sight, and then the sound of a broken twig was heard near her.
Story / Plot
Caroline and Nick walked toward a crime scene where a man was lying on his back; he was wrapped tightly inside a plastic bag. She thought the plastic bag was to prevent the man from struggling against his capturer. Then she saw his face or what left of it, there was blood everywhere but she still could see that there was no face underneath that blood. The whitish part of his skull was visibly seen. Whoever killed him had taken away his face.
Further investigation reported that the victim was still alive when the perpetrator peeled the victim’s face. There were no finger prints and no important clues were found.
McCarthy gave them full authority on the case. But the investigation was going nowhere as there was almost no clue about the killer.
Two months later, another body with the same condition was found not far from the pine wood forest. The founding of the second body made the killer known as Faceoff Killer.
They couldn’t find any similarity of both victims, except the fact that they no longer had face. The first victim was a banker and the second victim was a homeless. They didn’t have similar face or facial bone. One thing that connected them both was the place, both were found near the X park.
The man in the hooded robe was moving around a place like cave and breathing heavily, we could only see his back. He was holding the victim’s face and moving it closer to his face.
Caroline and Harry were having an argument. Harry wanted her to let the case go asit was getting too dangerous and gruesome.
Two months later, A young man of twenties named Gus Stewart was walking alone near the park. A man suddenly showed up in front of him, he was dragging a baseball bat. Stewart knew something was not right and tried to run but the man caught him. Stewart struggled hard but the man managed to put him down. He let out a big knife from under his robe and started to take Stewart’s face off.
Stewart’s body was found and the police started to suspect the park. They did a thorough search but found nothing. But the two months interval gave them new lead. Policemen were found patrolling near the park, no one was allowed to go near the park till they captured the killer. Caroline and Nick were one of the police that patrolled near the park.
Nick left Caroline to get something to drink. Half an hour later, she heard a scream. She tried calling Nick but there was no answer. She told headquarter that she heard a scream and went to check it. She went to the direction of the scream but found no one. She kept searching and finally found a baseball bat with blood on it. She was both terrified and excited. “I am going to nail this son of bitch” she thought.
Without waiting for back-up, she walked into the park. It took almost half an hour for her to find the thing that will haunt her dream forever. What she saw chilled her blood; a man in long cloak with the hood covering his face was kneeling on top of a man. There was blood around the victim’s head. The hooded man, the Faceoff Killer, had a knife in his left hand and a lump of bloody meat in his right hand. She looked at the victim, he no longer had face but she recognized his clothes, it was Nick’s. She was too shocked to move, she couldn’t believe what she had just witnessed.
The killer felt her presence. He suddenly stood up and ran leaving her behind. Caroline finally snapped out of her shock and shot the killer. It didn’t hit him. Caroline chased him into the park ignoring all the dangers that lay ahead.
Through the thick fog and the dense wood, she kept chasing him. She hated him so much. She would not let him see another day. “Damn this fog!!” she whispered between her breath. She didn’t realize that tears were falling from her eyes. She would rather die than letting the killer got away.
She heard a twig being stepped on and resumed her chase; little did she know she was being led by the killer.
Caroline finally saw the killer. He was standing with his back on her. She could see that there was cliff in front of the man. She aimed her gun at him.
“Turn around, asshole!!” she shouted.
The killer turned around slowly. Blood was dripping from the meat he was holding in his right hand, the meat was Nick’s face. Seeing Nick’s face angered her even more, however there was something about the killer that terrified her so bad.
The killer lifted his head.
“Oh my God,” Caroline whispered breathlessly. “What are you?”
The hooded man, the faceoff killer, had no face underneath his hood. There were only slit where a mouth should be and two small holes where a nose should be. He moved so fast, giving Caroline no chance to recover. There was fight between them only to be won by the killer. The killer knocked her down and prepared to skin her face. We could hear his whisper as he touch her face, ‘nice face’.
I didn’t tell much about Weaver and McGregor’s role because I don’t want to make this pitch too long, but they quite significant in the story.
Sorry I couldn’t come up with a better ending, I still like the hanging ending I created for my short, letting people decide what kind of ending they like it to be.
Will you watch my movie? It is not a slasher movie, it is more like Se7en.